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1. dress appropriately
we adorn ourselves with
"velvet" and "silk" (polyester).
try to catch the eyes of onlookers
as we stand, stranded at our
street corner islands,

pulling up our skirts—
unsure if we are
bringing evil in, or
letting it out.

2. make it natural
forget that it isn’t.
put on a show and let those lies
slip from your lips in bated breath
and your lungs heaving in the chest.

3. be prepared
I don’t leave the house
without my pocket knife,
it comes in handy
when you want to be set free

from this sort of lifestyle.
I've completely re-edited this, I think this is the final version, but who knows. 
it's definitely more...prostitute-y....
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is just fantastic. And then that last stanza is just such a punch in the gut. Perfectly done. I can absolutely see why this got a DD!
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adeline-renee Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student Writer
oh, thanks so much!
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herebewonder Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just stumbled across this and had to say I think it's very well done.

I can picture the scene and the kind of girl thinking this.

Excellent!

-c
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Aniusia483 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"when you want to be set free

from this sort of lifestyle."

because this sort of lifestyle is indeed a prizon... in hell.
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
pulling up our skirts—
unsure if we are 
bringing evil in, or 
letting it out. 

Best stanza
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Riftress Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, this was very boldly written, I love it! o_o
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adeline-renee Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student Writer
haha, yeah... thanks! :heart:
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Chamaguchi Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014
Wow, this was beautiful. Such beautiful writing. Well-deserved DD. <3
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adeline-renee Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Student Writer
thank you thank you thank you!! :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :party:
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